We were on top of bear mountain and we wanted to go down the mountain we started to go down but there was no path so we were walking and walking and walking. We finally saw a trail it was white and like a c e and my dad got me a stick and we kept on walking...
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...we found another trail it was a red s e with a white o e. Then we found a good place to rest
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for a bit. I saw another trail it was a yellow c e I got cut with the stick and finally got into the
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car and went home.
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Denion,
ReplyDeleteRemember that you are writing for people to read. If your reader can't understand you, you haven't done your job.
Much of this piece seems to be written in code. What does "i l r c" mean? Or how about, "q a r u n
t l i"?
It is important that you write to be read.
Ms. Waldman